Fangala the Flying Feline

First off, let me say that this was very good. I look forward to reading more. But I do have a few comments for you, so here it goes: Her ...

A thing about poetry: you don't need to end every line with a comma. In this case, it makes the poem halty and hard to read. I think you could ...

When I started reading this, I thought, "Oh, it's okay. Just another depressed poem." But then I read the line: "all looked away from her...--all but me." And my heart ...

Very nice. You need some commas, and it might make it flow better if every line doesn't end in a period. I love how you call the cat "an explosion ...

Whatever you do, don't change the last line! It's powerful. I love it. As for the rest of the poem, just for an exercise, try compacting it to get rid ...